Cheers
Mike

I think your hard work is good, but it is not clear that why these three parts of academic works are relevant to your project. why you need them, what lesson you could learn from those papers and what design implication you could come up. you need to explain those issues instead of just summarizing what they say, then readers could know what you are talking about.

and “Methodologies to protect your privacy” is not relevant to this part of work. you need to find papers giving suggestions on how a service provider protects user’s privacy instead of papers telling what users should do to protect own privacy.

Btw, i think the figure 1 is really interesting. You could try to not just focus on privacy, but think about other components like trust, and social relation

-feng

In table 1,2:

1.what do you mean by “information sharing platform”? what type of information? who share it and share it with whom?

2. Time coverage: I just don’t understand the purpose of it. All those tools you analyzed are “ongoing informaiton”, then how your app will be different from them?

3. Reminder: who remind whom of what?it seems that in different tools “reminder” means different things (foursquare v.s. MobiQpons). You need to make it clear in the table otherwise table just misguides readers. (same case for point 1 i mentioned above)

In conclusion:

you say “those existing tools are lack of social elements or at the least not featured as social networking, except the Foursquare”. well, i don’t agree. foodspotting actually is a social network connecting people who love food. They check-in food instead of check-in location.

and also, you need to tell readers why you think social elements is good and what value it could add into coupon/deal app. if there is no good reason, then why we need it? this is the very important question you should answer.

you also mentioned “our application covers the ongoing and in the near predictable future discount information”. i think you should mention why future discount information is something people need and how actually it works ( just a simple announcement like “hey, we will have a 30% deal next week” or what? and why this announcement is something people care? is it normal that companies always announce some deals in advance and let customers wait for a period to actually get the deal? )

In table 3:

you say individual user’s information is objective and store’s information is subjective. is it wrong?

“in advance discount information” what does it mean? looks weird.

and I personally never see shops announce deals in advance. they always announce it when they think the deal could start. if you really think in-advance announcement is important and meaningful for both stores and customers, then you should explain it and find evidences to support your argument. In addition, you should also explain how store could engage people through announcing deals in advance and then how it works. i think we need some business plan here.

you might answer above questions via summarizing features of your app with reasons in your “feature” post.

i’m looking forward to it

-feng

comments for you :

1. As you described : “Comment. Users can also post a comment to reply a discount message, so that other users could get benefit from the comment.” . how actually users could get benefit from the comment? simple comment like “it’s cool!” “That’s a huge deal” can not bring any benefits to other users. so can you explain it and give examples?

2. For “Location-based discount information”, as you described there, I think you’d better highlight how social information could assist filter function and how to display social information on the map to help users make decision. Then you could claim in the final section that comments are one good feature for users.